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Change: with plans of making this world her own. Sadly she didn't realize this until it was too late ... that she also carried this same virus."Max couldn't believe what he was hearing. It was strange but in
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Change: "I have been living here with the occupants of this trailer park ... I've been caring for those my little sister has cast aside, it was her carrieridea of perfection that has led these people to cast these children
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Change: invyedenvyed me...Because little Chimera,myself...Seemed to be our fathers favorite one.Her invyenvy grew to hate as time passed.She wished to be the only one in our fathers universe...The only one
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Change: Queen...She was here,standing right before me.I leaped to my feet with all the grace of a wild animal."What is she doing here??!!" Anger burned the
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Change: out.I came to with the scientist standing over me."Someone'sme."Someone's here to see you max." he said.Isaid. I was layed out on a bed only a trailer park could've given birth to.Ito. I sat up,myup, my eyes met hers...Thehers ... The black Queen.
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Change: would effect her. Then I blacked out. I came to with the scientist standing over me."Someone's here to see you max." he said.I was layed out on a bed only a trailer park could've given birth to.I sat up,my eyes met hers...The black Queen.
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Change: I was so angry I could scream ... half-breeds ... like myself. Just who the hell does this bitch think she is? But as my
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Change: screamed.Then in a soft voice in my head in the voice of the child."I did nothing you didn't accept." "What the hell does that mean?" I asked. She said nothing,she only watched me with those empty eyes."It's your blood that accepted it.Like other half breeds like yourself."
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Change: "What do you want this time!" I screamed. This woman, this witch ... this BITCH! Who has made my life a living hell! I wasn't sure what came over me but I was angry, I wanted this to end ... this nightmare she created.She looked at
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Change: The child...Or the younger me...Looked up into my eyes.A sardonic grin washed over it's face."Hello Max...Wanna see something cool?" It asked...Really I didn't want to
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Change: As I stood there in my dream world waiting for the nightmare to begin, the one that will reveal where my body lays in the
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Change: (Here it is again,the darkness.I already know where it's going to lead...To that same dream world;That unknown phantasm that has taken me down so many
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Change: engineered inutaro."inutaro. A human-alien hybrid."I couldn't handle the answers ... my head began spinning ... alien .... hybrid ... I ... don't want to know the answers ... wish none of this ever happened. The next thing I knew, I hit the ground hard and blacked out.
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Change: find a place that would house their D-N-A properties until they found earth.They reached that goal in the 40s....You're40s....Your Grandfather was the first one to be engineered in utaro."inutaro."
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Change: "I'm "I'm not playing games with you?-I'm just trying to protect you...That's all." The scientist spewed,with that same careless sardonic grin.My anoyance was at a
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Change: "Look, I'm sorry. I just ... its been rough inside that stupid spaceship. It was a living hell," I admitted. I wanted to cry but
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Change: "Let go of my arm or you'll draw back a stump that'll never grow back." He said. For some reason I did as he ordered.It
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Change: people?!" I wanted to know, I demanded to know the truth now. I grabbed the scientist's shoulder and turned him completely around. "You told me .. no promised me that you would explain the nightmare I've been living. Now speak!"The scientist became agitated by my aggressive behavior.
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Change: "Do you work at the lab with my dad?" The child asked. Before I could utter a word the scientist answered for me."No sweety....." He
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Change: As we arrived to this camp of his, I was a little disappointed yet not surprised at the same time. We arrived in an old
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